Wednesday, October 15, 2008

Waiting

Pen and paper by my pillow
A poetic heart.. short on words
wishing for the wishes
foolishly smiling on smiles
listening to the dreamy eyes
and waiting...

It rained two nights back
but its smell.. still with me
I look up to the heavens
but no rain coming my way
praying with my hand held out
and waiting...

In the evening I walk back home
singing an old song..no one is listening
Teary eyes and I can cry
no one is looking
to catch a loose kite.. falling slowly
are you waiting?

39 comments:

Keshi said...

Prakhar ur quite the poet. That was too beautiful!


**Teary eyes and I can cry
no one is looking

and no one will see..


Keshi.

Chriz said...

get a couple of beer cans.. cheers...good work bro

Voice said...

isiliye main poems nahi padhta
samajh me hi nahi ata :(

but liked the last 2 lines to catch a loose kite...

:)

good work Jack

EmmaK said...

what a beautiful sentiment

Divya said...

rains...hmmm...lucky u :(
yahan to october hai aisa lag hi ni raha.

beautiful poem :)

Heart'n'Soul said...

touchin and so well written
such simple words n still so much depth

Luvd it :)

Prakhar said...

@Keshi

Thanks a lot dear :)

Prakhar said...

@Chriz

Thank you!
m off beer bro...for very obvious reasons :D

Prakhar said...

@bhav

chal kuch to accha laga...waise poems ke liye to jaisa interpret karna chaho..kar sakte ho...likhne waale ne kuch aur hi socha ho shayad!

Prakhar said...

@emmak

Thank you for stopping by!

Prakhar said...

@divya

hehe...well its rainin here quite regularly..shaam ko to almost everyday...to bheeg ke jaana padta hai...but m lovin it :D

Thanks :)

Prakhar said...

@heart n soul

Thanks...I m not very gud with big words...so i keep them simple :)

rain girl said...

nice poem buddy. real nice.

however, if you don't mind me butting in, you have potential, but you need to improve too. which i know is pretty impossible when one writes in a mood. :P still, bear with me..

'but no rain coming my way
praying with my hand held out
and waiting..."

it would be better if you say it as "but no rain comes my way"

the tenses, you see.

rest was, as i said, nice. a collage of emotions. :)

and if i have, in any way, offended you, apologies.

take care. :)

Chriz said...

haha come to my page for some funny video..

Prakhar said...

@rain girl

thanks for the suggestions :)...wl try to keep this in mind!!

I really appreciate your effort!


nd no need for apologies! :)

Creation said...

The poetic heart...
The rain...
And then, the old song....

naturally reflecting..? or reflexively natural?

The reference to the kite...
Well, somehow, I always associate kites with freedom. but definitely thats not how you meant it to be... right?
If not that.. then what..?
Something gone haywire... and now there are attempts to put it back together?

Please reply...
lovely poem.
straight from the heart...

Prakhar said...

@creation

For me...a loose kite is really free.. "no strings attached" :)..

The poetic heart is ..you can say smitten ...

The rain..its symbolic of love

and the old song...thats abt loneliness!

I think now its more clear!

m glad u asked...thanks :)

Creation said...

Hmm...

but if the kite is indeed 'freedom' to you.. then why do you talk about catching it?

that is like imprisoning yourself...

Solitaire said...

Mera comment kaha gayab ho gaya?

HP said...

i loved this! blogrolling you right awayy!!!

Jagjit said...

Lovely poem! And the track even better!! i blogrolled u

Prakhar said...

@Creation

Catching here is not about imprisonment...its about the commitment which one is ready to make..(prbbly ..dun wanna be free of everythin.. love or commitment..)

a bit confusing i guess...m sorry...not able to explain better!! :)

Prakhar said...

@Angle

Issi me likha tha na comment??..i dint received any :(....phir se likho!! :P

Prakhar said...

@hp

Thanks for stoppin by :)

Prakhar said...

@jagjit

m glad u liked it...the track goes with the poem..

thanks for stoppin by :)

Creation said...

Right.. no need to feel sorry or anything.. i got it now..
the commitment.. righto!

The poem makes so much more sense now!

Beautiful!!

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

absolutely amazing. I loved it :-)

Still thinking said...

Are you still waiting? :)

Beautiful.

Prakhar said...

@Creation

Thanks again!! :)

Prakhar said...

@raaji

Thanks dear!! :)

Prakhar said...

@still thinking

yup...still waiting :)

thanks dear !!

Trinaa said...

omg!! awesome awesome!!!!!!!

Beauty and the BEast said...

you make waiting sound beautiful...

Sweetstickychewy said...

Thats such a beautiful and true poem Prakhar.:)

It draws my heart...:)

Cheeries!

Prakhar said...

@trinaa

Thanks a lot dear! :)

Prakhar said...

@ B n B

Well..it is beautiful at times..when you know its gonna end!...otherwise..

Prakhar said...

@ Sweetstickychewy

Thanks dear... m glad it moved u a bit! :)

Reflections said...

so melancholic....its the change of climate, I guess:-D

Prakhar said...

@reflection

may be :D